Meh Book!

[Rose312]

Based on a short story I wrote for my English class, had to right a horror/mystery. I wrote about an unsolved murder blah blah blah...well this is the story ( book ) that combines both the Short story and the back story. Enjoy! *EDIT* AND DON'T BE AFRAID TO COMMENT AND SHARE YOUR OPINION!
Rose Field
Chapter I : Mother
Adam opened his eyes and took a few looks around. The taste of blood in his mouth...the smell of wet snow...the sounds of nothingness. He was laying in the street about 4 feet from a parked car with the back door opened. “ where am I...” he though to him self. He looked for signs and noticed a sign with the words “ Rose Field” carved into it. Memories flooded his body.
A child standing in a bathroom looking into the mirror as a figure appears behind him. A faceless figure. It approached as a voice breaks into the memory “ Mommy loves you dear...” Soon The child stood in front of a grave marked with only the letters A.J.C.
Adam got up from the snow covered street and wiped the blood from his nose. He approached the sign and looked over it once more noticing scratches and what appeared to be a name and dates carved under the word “ Field”. The name “ Lucy Shadows 1997-2009“

[Rose312]

Adam got up from the snow covered street and wiped the blood from his nose. He approached the sign and looked over it once more noticing scratches and what appeared to be a name and dates carved under the word “ Field”. The name “ Lucy Shadows 1997-2009“ The name seemed so familiar as if he had seen it a thousand times before. Lucy Shadows...he could’t figure it out.
He looked around. The car still in the same spot. It seemed as if it was parked recently, within the hour. Snow gently fell from the cloudless sky above. He was surrounded mostly by trees, and a few houses, but he could make out the main area of town a few steps down the road. He’s best bet was to go into the town and look for help. Maybe his memory would return...maybe he’d find answers.

[Rose312]

He walked down the road taking looks at the area around him. He swore he saw figures watching him from the snowy mist. He could hear a dog barking in the distance along with the sound of soft, very soft, foot steps in the snow. “ Hello?” Adam called. His voice echoed as if through time and space.
He finally reached the town. Store doors and windows were boarded off as if they have been closed for years. Cars with rusted bumpers sat alone in the street. Street signs sat frozen in time and traffic lights swayed He began to see red as if blood filled his eyes...
Everything was clear...but the town had almost changed shape...or time. It appeared to be summer time...cars roamed through the town along with a few people. A man, dressed as a doctor, walked up to him, and then into a building to his left. “ Now son...be careful okay?” The blood red came over him again...the sound of breaking glass ripped through his skull.
Everything was cold and dead again. He looked to the the left...there stood the building as if new. “ Dr. Adam Caper.” was hung above the door. He stepped up to the front door and tried to look in through a small crack in the wood. All he could see was darkness, the out line of a desk, some flowers, and what looked like mice moving around on the floor. He could see a light flick on in a room in the far back down a long hallway with water dripping from above. He saw a shadow moving around the room.
He stepped down and looked for a way to get to the back of the Office. He walked up the street and made a left. He looked around for some sort of back ally. It was hard for him to make out shapes with the snow beginning to get heavier.

[Lin]

Now why in the world would you triple post when there is an edit button.

[Rose312]

I didn't think it would all fit in one post..would it? What if it doesn't?

[Lin]

I think it will and besides for someone joining just not too long ago you sure post some spam.

[Karui]

Well, look at my posts. Almost 400 in a month.

On topic: The story reminded me of Silent Hill.

[Rose312]

I'm serious about what I write, I don't really like you calling it " spam" so if you're going to sit around calling it spam please stay out of this thread thanks

Ya a lot of people say it sounds like Silent Hill...it's just how I write..the whole atmosphere and such...

[Rose312]

Chapter I : Mother
Adam opened his eyes and took a few looks around. The taste of blood in his mouth...the smell of wet snow...the sounds of nothingness. He was laying in the street about 4 feet from a parked car with the back door opened. “ where am I...” he though to him self. He looked for signs and noticed a sign with the words “ Rose Field” carved into it. Memories flooded his body.
A child standing in a bathroom looking into the mirror as a figure appears behind him. A faceless figure. It approached as a voice breaks into the memory “ Mommy loves you dear...” Soon The child stood in front of a grave marked with only the letters A.J.C.
Adam got up from the snow covered street and wiped the blood from his nose. He approached the sign and looked over it once more noticing scratches and what appeared to be a name and dates carved under the word “ Field”. The name “ Lucy Shadows 1997-2009“ The name seemed so familiar as if he had seen it a thousand times before. Lucy Shadows...he could’t figure it out.
He looked around. The car still in the same spot. It seemed as if it was parked recently, within the hour. Snow gently fell from the cloudless sky above. He was surrounded mostly by trees, and a few houses, but he could make out the main area of town a few steps down the road. He’s best bet was to go into the town and look for help. Maybe his memory would return...maybe he’d find answers.
He walked down the road taking looks at the area around him. He swore he saw figures watching him from the snowy mist. He could hear a dog barking in the distance along with the sound of soft, very soft, foot steps in the snow. “ Hello?” Adam called. His voice echoed as if through time and space.
He finally reached the town. Store doors and windows were boarded off as if they have been closed for years. Cars with rusted bumpers sat alone in the street. Street signs sat frozen in time and traffic lights swayed He began to see red as if blood filled his eyes...
Everything was clear...but the town had almost changed shape...or time. It appeared to be summer time...cars roamed through the town along with a few people. A man, dressed as a doctor, walked up to him, and then into a building to his left. “ Now son...be careful okay?” The blood red came over him again...the sound of breaking glass ripped through his skull.
Everything was cold and dead again. He looked to the the left...there stood the building as if new. “ Dr. Adam Caper.” was hung above the door. He stepped up to the front door and tried to look in through a small crack in the wood. All he could see was darkness, the out line of a desk, some flowers, and what looked like mice moving around on the floor. He could see a light flick on in a room in the far back down a long hallway with water dripping from above. He saw a shadow moving around the room.
He stepped down and looked for a way to get to the back of the Office. He walked up the street and made a left. He looked around for some sort of back ally. It was hard for him to make out shapes with the snow beginning to get heavier. He walked along the side walk looking for an ally or some type of door. He felt a steel fence and looked around for either a way in or around or a hole. He suddenly noticed a figure at about 9 feet tall standing on the other side of the fence eyeing him down with a vicious gaze. The figure took a step closer gripping the fence with it’s massive hands. Blood drenched fingers tugged on the fence.
Adam fell back and crawled back at the Figure tried to push it’s way through the fence. It knocked the fence down smashing on Adam knocking him out for a few minutes. He could hear light foot steps coming out of the shadows of the dark corners of the empty town


GOOD NEWS IT ALL DOES FIT XD

[Lin]

Well, look at my posts. Almost 400 in a month.

On topic: The story reminded me of Silent Hill.

I'm sure you read what Stu wrote in your intro at biohaze.

Please don't even consider spamming the place like you do on THIA.

>_>

GOOD NEWS IT ALL DOES FIT XD

Well what a surprise, another double post.

[Rose312]

I'd like it if you stopping turning my thread into spam, thanks. Please get the fuck back on topic? Opinions and though on my writing.

[Lin]

I'd like it if you stopping turning my thread into spam, thanks. Please get the fuck back on topic? Opinions and though on my writing.

You think I was turning your topic into spam?

Spam=opinion are different.

[Rose312]

Can you just stay on topic? I don't want this thread closed.

[Karui]

Its not spam if its on topic. I also had failed to realise that anybody was on trial for spam. Just ignore him Rose.

[Lin]

You think double posting is not a spam

[Lilith]

Just because Rose posts a lot doesn't mean it's spam, A.K.47. If you don't plan on commenting on his work, you have no need to be in here.

On Topic: It does sound like silent hill, but I like it. It makes the reader wonder what is going on and holds interest. Good job! ^^

[Rose312]

Ya I am... I just take my writing seriously and It pisses me off when people come in and completely change the topic and turn in into an argument...

Anyways...Ya...Sh2 is was some what...I wouldn't call it inspiration but...I wrote before I played the game and after playing I kinda got more into Writing about Psychological Horror/mysteries because it gave the reader something to think about and made them see things in new ways...which is my goal

[Lilith]

Just ignore him Rose.

Good advice!

On Topic:
It's written well so far. I'm not sure what else to say. Just make sure you proofread it and check grammar.

[Rose312]

Ya me and Melissa were going over the whole thing but chapter by chapter. Gonna change words around and such. I'll add some more later on tonight. Thanks for the support

[Lilith]

You are very welcome, Rose! *hugs*